*What else do I still need to do?
I still need to read my sources and take more notes, so I can have some more supporting details to bolster my thesis. I also need to organize my sources by using index cards and annotate them correctly. This will ensure a better prepared prewriting session in the next week or so.
* What do I need outside help with?
I will need outside help with my sources. I will need an outside perspective on my thesis to make sure I am not missing an points I can integrate. I will also need help with editing and second opinions on how differently I can phrase a sentence or paragraph. I will also need help with making sure I stay within the same tense and for comma placement and grammatical errors.
*Why am I feeling threatened by this research paper (if you are)? or Why am I feeling confident about this research paper.
I am feeling confident about this research paper because this is something I feel I have a somewhat personal perspective on. People vent about things that upset them in different ways. I remember my mom venting on her fear of Desert Storm by drawing a cartoon about her feelings at the precise moment that the war had started. Now here I am trying to express my feelings on the pain and suffering that our unit has been through during this deployment. I feel for these soldiers so much. This is my outlet and I hope to be able to bring about an understanding to my audience on what these soldiers are enduring. I also hope to further my understand so I can find a way to help.
Saturday, October 29, 2011
Friday, October 21, 2011
Lesson 8 Journal Entry #2
*Read any article pertaining to your research topic that contains a visual element (a graphic). Name that article and its author. Explain why the visual is effective or ineffective in swaying your view on the topic. Make it interesting for the reader who does not already know your thesis. Include a URL to find the graphic (or instructions for doing so if you can't link to it).
In a Los Angeles Times article "Long Term Medical Care Extensive for Wounded Soldiers" written by Tony Perry, the image of Marine Lance Cpl Juan Dominquez is very moving. He is a triple amputee that was injured by a roadside bomb while serving in Afghanistan. This visual is very effective for my view on my topic because it is very personal to my life. It is the reality of some soldiers in my husband's platoon. The casualties caused by Improvised Explosive Devices (IEDs) and the number of amputees as a result has increased in the two years. The strength and perserverance of these soldiers as they struggle with the realities of being single, double, and triple amputees inspire me. I hope to write and research this topic to help others have a better understanding of the hardships they go through and the endless courage they have to continue on after experience such terrible injuries.
Image and article can be found at http://seattletimes.nwsource.com/html/nationworld/2015049677_injuredtroops15.html
In a Los Angeles Times article "Long Term Medical Care Extensive for Wounded Soldiers" written by Tony Perry, the image of Marine Lance Cpl Juan Dominquez is very moving. He is a triple amputee that was injured by a roadside bomb while serving in Afghanistan. This visual is very effective for my view on my topic because it is very personal to my life. It is the reality of some soldiers in my husband's platoon. The casualties caused by Improvised Explosive Devices (IEDs) and the number of amputees as a result has increased in the two years. The strength and perserverance of these soldiers as they struggle with the realities of being single, double, and triple amputees inspire me. I hope to write and research this topic to help others have a better understanding of the hardships they go through and the endless courage they have to continue on after experience such terrible injuries.
Image and article can be found at http://seattletimes.nwsource.com/html/nationworld/2015049677_injuredtroops15.html
Lesson 8 Journal Entry #1
*Preview, read, and annotate any image in the essay "Two Ways a Woman Can Get Hurt";Advertizing and Violence" on pp. 417-441 of ReReading America. What is its strongest argument? Be sure to describe the image, tell what page it is on, and so forth... in a way that a person who is not taking this course can apprecitae its significance.
The strongest argument that the author, Jean Kilbourne, made was for the advertising images for Calvin Klein. The image on p. 436 features a teenage boy wearing daisy duke shorts and sitting on a floor with his legs bent and spread. His underwear can clearly be seen peeking out from the crotch of his shorts. Kilbourne suggested that Calvin Klein purposely does his new clothes campaigns to imitate child exploitation. He profits by getting higher sales, more publicity, and maintain his rebel appearance. He does not think of the repercussions that can result from this and the affect it will have on growning children and their self esteem. I am in agreement. He uses something that is very taboo and immoral to further his business.
The strongest argument that the author, Jean Kilbourne, made was for the advertising images for Calvin Klein. The image on p. 436 features a teenage boy wearing daisy duke shorts and sitting on a floor with his legs bent and spread. His underwear can clearly be seen peeking out from the crotch of his shorts. Kilbourne suggested that Calvin Klein purposely does his new clothes campaigns to imitate child exploitation. He profits by getting higher sales, more publicity, and maintain his rebel appearance. He does not think of the repercussions that can result from this and the affect it will have on growning children and their self esteem. I am in agreement. He uses something that is very taboo and immoral to further his business.
Lesson 7 Journal Entry #1
*Who is the audience for your essay? What is the thesis of essay? Does it include the claim and 3 supporting reasons to make it a strong thesis?The audience for my essay would be taxpayers, federal prison officials, and advocacy groups. They need to be swayed by my view on the treatment of prisoners in the federal prison system. Prisoners should only be given the basic human rights and receive privileges that are geared toward rehabilitation. My supporting reasons include how prisoners are in prison for a reason, because they broke the law. The costs of keeping them in luxuries with amenities that even the basic law-abiding citizen does not recieve for free, and how is expensive toward taxpayers. These points did well to support my thesis.
*Can the audience be swayed by your claim and reasons? Why or why not? Tell why each reason is strong enoug to sway a person to your way of thinking.
I believe that the audience is swayed by my claim because my reasons support my view. It is expensive to provide unnecessary privileges to people who committed crimes. We, the taxpayers, are the ones keeping them comfortable. They did the crime so now they need to be punished. If rehabilitation can help keep them out of prison and onto a better life then that is the services that need to be provided. I believe my audience will be swayed because they are mostly all taxpayers and law-abiding and can relate to my position.
*What value does each of your sources have to your audience?
The value is that they are either government officials that are trying to change the way things are done in the prison system to alleviate the burden for taxpayers. They are also trying to find the balance between both imprisonment and rehabilitation to benefit all parties involved. Even the opposing sources offer personal experience to back up their claims. However, it still in favor of my view because my audience is not based on prisoners but those who have to pay.
*Can the audience be swayed by your claim and reasons? Why or why not? Tell why each reason is strong enoug to sway a person to your way of thinking.
I believe that the audience is swayed by my claim because my reasons support my view. It is expensive to provide unnecessary privileges to people who committed crimes. We, the taxpayers, are the ones keeping them comfortable. They did the crime so now they need to be punished. If rehabilitation can help keep them out of prison and onto a better life then that is the services that need to be provided. I believe my audience will be swayed because they are mostly all taxpayers and law-abiding and can relate to my position.
*What value does each of your sources have to your audience?
The value is that they are either government officials that are trying to change the way things are done in the prison system to alleviate the burden for taxpayers. They are also trying to find the balance between both imprisonment and rehabilitation to benefit all parties involved. Even the opposing sources offer personal experience to back up their claims. However, it still in favor of my view because my audience is not based on prisoners but those who have to pay.
Lesson 6 Journal Entry #4
*Tell the reader of your blog why understanding visual elements is useful to writing arguments.
Visual elements can enhance the views that you are trying to impart on the audience. If you are writing an argument a graphic or picture can help it along and get your points across. Many readers need a better understand of what they are reading. A graphic or picture in an argument can help them understand what emotion or feeling, you as an author, is trying to impart to them. If one word is the forefront to your argument and needs to be singled out from the rest of the writing, then a bold visual element can help. Another example can be a picture that will impart a strong emotion on a particle point that the author is trying to make in order to sway the audience toward his or her view.
Visual elements can enhance the views that you are trying to impart on the audience. If you are writing an argument a graphic or picture can help it along and get your points across. Many readers need a better understand of what they are reading. A graphic or picture in an argument can help them understand what emotion or feeling, you as an author, is trying to impart to them. If one word is the forefront to your argument and needs to be singled out from the rest of the writing, then a bold visual element can help. Another example can be a picture that will impart a strong emotion on a particle point that the author is trying to make in order to sway the audience toward his or her view.
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